Dark Poetry #3 |
Phobic Hallucinations |
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
What I see that has always been Swells, condemned A hate-like nature with foreign pride Mischef filtered grin stretched Across the apathetic paleness A small dot in the expanse of sarcasm A glitch in the thought process The point of suffacation in the midst of pleasure Hold back nothing except a pumping heart In a race with reality A failure and explosion that confirms consciousness By stripping every once of strength, diginity, etc. Comfort at this reallization Paces and falls into the toilet Just do something new Relax Its fine ok slumber and sweet dreams Push and tick Drop and flick Rough and slick Forever and real Touch and feel Just say NO And let it go Freedom weakened rage Simple Liberate No more the cage a trickle of music from a well |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
This feels a bit diffrent for you. I like the length, its a bit longer. Left my mouth a little full, I'm still try to force all the the material down. It tastes good though. I liked this line: Across the apathetic paleness. I didn't like how you said ect. at the 5 line in the 3 stanza. It detracted. All in all I enjoyed this piece. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
"A small dot in the expanse of sarcasm A glitch in the thought process" i like how you have been showing different styles, nice wrtite keep it up... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Lexy the paleness thing is about a saddened face and the other is about crap seems so thick that the entire world seems just artificial and the only thing that lets you know that its real is the fact that it keeps getting worse.... to the point you just puke. Thanx for the compliments. Posting here just keeps getting better and better. Thanx eor, I guess Im experimenting a lil bit right now, and who knows, it could turn out to be my style when its finished, which it wont be but still. Sorry about the run on sentence. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
i miss read lexy, thanx for the advise. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Push and tick Drop and flick Rough and slick Forever and real Touch and feel Just say NO And let it go Freedom weakened rage Simple Liberate No more the cage" Ohhhhhhhh...loved these words...liberation..indeed... Susan C. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Awesome. Bravo! |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx Susan, it did feel good. thanx Kar. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A thoughtful write, well done ~wranx |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
thanx wranx a trickle of music from a well |
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