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B3jamboree
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 33
Michigan

0 posted 2003-08-04 02:04 PM



The pen is my poppy
  It is the poem
  I poke through my epidermis
It is prose that lingers on my breath
  It is words that mingle with my humors
I ejaculate words
  I vomit words

I suck the emotion
  Of a series of words
    Through a cotton ball
      Into my syringe
       I tap the needle
        I hold the turniqute tight
         I prod the willing vein

I ejaculate words
   Onto the stomach's of daughter's of Joe Anywhere
     Onto the small's of the back's of John Doe's sons

I piss words
   I relive myself of them on mailboxes of people I don't like
  I piss them in dark allys at three thirty in the morning

I sweat words
    In a factory where the men have little appreciation for them
     I work at them there as if I were not part of the real world

I cry words
  Into secret notebooks hidden beneath my matress
The ink is blurred with salty dried drops

Words are me
  I am words

© Copyright 2003 Christopher G Williams - All Rights Reserved
Match
Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286
Canada Edmonton
1 posted 2003-08-04 02:36 PM


This is by far a great poem, I enjoyed it so much, Keep writing
-ash

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair


eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2003-08-04 07:32 PM


i understand where you were going wiht this, but personally i didnt enjoy it, it seemed to me you were trying to hard to make an allogory of this poem(i could be wrong) but for an allorory to work it has to work as a poem first...it is not that it was to graphic or anything, because i liked how the words came out, but i think it could use some work...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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