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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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California

0 posted 2003-08-02 02:08 PM


I'm looking through the sky.
Upward glances toward a solid grey expanse.
I let the rain fall in my eyes, like the tears that refuse to loosen.
I'll be your winter.
Dark yet comfortable.
Silver skin, that tingles at the touch of.
Hard air that rushes up against me.
Leaving me bruised.
This solid grey horizon..
that's all I can promise you.



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eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
1 posted 2003-08-02 05:51 PM


"I'll be your winter.
Dark yet comfortable."

beautiful as always

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2003-08-02 07:39 PM


I have to agree with eor this is beautiful.  I kept picturing the face of a pretty, young girl in a northern clime at night with a full moon and gentle rain dropplets.  

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexy
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California
3 posted 2003-08-02 11:04 PM


I'm pleased I was able to paint a clear picture in your mind. northern climate, young, droplets. yup. Thanks for the reply. I appreciate your time.  

[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-02-2003 11:05 PM).]

coyote
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4 posted 2003-08-03 01:19 AM


simply beautiful.........

coyote

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." WFS

Purple Poet On Wheels
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since 2002-06-21
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5 posted 2003-08-03 09:45 PM


Great Stuff
Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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Michigan
6 posted 2003-08-03 10:16 PM


Terrific...
I simply felt like I was somewhere else when I was reading this.  Well done.

Tomer

Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
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Canada
7 posted 2003-08-03 10:53 PM


Very beautiful.  No other way to describe it really, perfectly written in my opinion.
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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California
8 posted 2003-08-04 05:01 PM


perfectly..wow, thanks. I'm blushing.
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