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PointlesS
Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 21
Oconomowoc, Wisconsin

0 posted 2003-08-01 12:14 PM


I sit around shedding some tears
I remember the times thoughout the years
I think about what all went wrong
Why did he do it, did he not belong?

A cry for help is how it began
But time passed and he made up his plan
He killed himself with tons of pain
Everyone's stunned, no one can explain

Why is the word that tears up my mind
How could I not see this? Was I that blind?
I think of what could've been done
I could've saved him, but instead I shunned

Where ever he is, I wish I could say
These feelings and thoughts that eat me away
Goodbye is something I wish I could tell
But now he's gone, and probably in hell

Oh how I wish and hope I'll know
Maybe that'll lighten the blow
Never again will I see my friend
Just why did he have to make it end?

© Copyright 2003 Patrick Conway - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2003-08-01 12:32 PM


But now he's gone, and probably in hell
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Raw and pure.  That was a scarry thought for someone to picture their friend "probably in hell" but fact is it more than likely true.

Kinda creepy if you think about it.  But this was a very nice poem.  

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexia
Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 111
Nowhere
2 posted 2003-08-01 07:30 AM


Intense, but really good.
mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

3 posted 2003-08-01 12:49 PM


Venting through writing is very constructive for all. I agree, very intense and well written.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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