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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-07-28 04:52 PM


When he's off for a stroll in the park
or something less tradional.
I'll sit here in this plastic chair,
head turned down
thumbing the carpet.
Thinking..
how selfish I've become.

Hours wasted..
trying to provide for us.
Money in your pocket,
food on the table.
Damn it, why can't I just be happy.
I'm thankful.
But don't look at me with so much disdain..
as if I'm something you didn't create.
You filled your desire
and now I'm formed.
Alive...or so I'm told.

Pay your price.
Lay the coins upon the table.
Don't throw you gulit onto me.
Don't feed me those lines.
Don't expect any pity.
I'll throw them up one by one.
And line them in a row.

Neither of us has the right.
So lets keep the conversation light.
A smile across the dinner table.
A kiss goodnight


[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-28-2003 09:19 PM).]

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wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2003-07-30 10:38 PM


Really, a very nice piece. Wonder why it's gotten so little attention?

Good work
~wranx

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2003-07-30 10:56 PM


loved this, i thought i was the only one who felt like this...glad to know i'm not...thank you for writing this...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2003-07-30 10:59 PM


yes, that makes two of us. thank you. I appreciate your reply. I am falling apart emotionally, and there is semi comfort in knowing others, people I don't even know and may never meet are willing to tell me good job and mean it. Worth taking another breath..thank you!
Lex

Cecil
New Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 3

4 posted 2003-07-31 12:31 PM


Deep and delightful, enjoyed the way it was executed.
Cecil

Cecil
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 3

5 posted 2003-07-31 12:32 PM


Deep and delightful, enjoyed the way it was executed.
Cecil

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2003-07-31 04:22 PM


This is a good poem.  And even though I cant relate to it as much right now I have had my experiences.  Nice write.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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