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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2003-07-27 06:10 PM



Angel breaks her feathers
shedding them away.
She prays them each a prayer
as they burn to fuel her rage.

She's come of age
and ripped apart the last page.
She can't remember, anymore
what the words should say.

So she lies in stagnant waste
afraid to bleed or breathe.
She pulls apart her veins
and promises to set them free.

But her agony is endless.
Her loss has gone unseen.
She fades into a grey mist, and
dissolves into eternity.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

© Copyright 2003 Shay D. - All Rights Reserved
Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
1 posted 2003-07-27 06:24 PM


I really like the poem, I thought it flowed very wonderfully and imagery is awesome.  Good stuff.
Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-07-28 09:26 PM


Great stuff. awesome images. I smell talent..
I especially liked the 2nd stanza
For such a strong poem..the end felt the slighest bit weak. But that might just be me.
~Lex..

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-28-2003 09:28 PM).]

Dark Kisses
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since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas
3 posted 2003-07-29 12:27 PM


*But her agony is endless.
Her loss has gone unseen.
She fades into a grey mist, and
dissolves into eternity*

You are a wonderful writer!  The images are GREAT!


A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

[This message has been edited by Dark Kisses (07-29-2003 12:28 AM).]

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