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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-07-27 01:52 AM



More space to fit the dead
Accident burning red
Auto equipment all around
Stand silent behind the mound

Debris collage in the air
Cold and silent solid stare
Inventory down supply
Ill prepared infections fly

Run Run vision weak
Slow and lost cut the meek
Itchy feeling conscious state
Hurt collide exceeding rate


Cohernet blur ceilling white
Erotic madam sponge polite
Soft and blue comfort steel
Baise and milk blood conceal

Stablize continue happy numb
Cotton sky I think Im dumb
Promises guaranteed the best
Glossy eye in eternal rest

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2003-07-27 02:40 AM


Liking the "debris collage"...cool image!


~wranx

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2003-07-27 03:23 PM


very nice, loved the imagery you made with in this poem...very neat way to describe during and after the event...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

3 posted 2003-07-27 03:32 PM


stand silent behind the mound. I like this line. Vague for thought, but powerful in many ways. great writing.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
4 posted 2003-07-27 08:37 PM


I can't help but smile at you guys compliments .  

Thanx,

GIS

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
5 posted 2003-07-28 04:44 PM


Stabilize contiune happy numb
cotton sky I think I'm dumb

I loved that part. You have a way with words.
~Lex...

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2003-07-28 10:20 PM


Thanks Lex,

Its cool knowing people enjoy my poetry.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill roar like hell

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