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Is It Me? |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys 
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I don’t now if it's my mind or reality But my paranoia has got the best of me I know it's not your fault SHE instilled it inside of me I want so much to trust you All I ever want is honesty You leave for a few hours Upon your return face red You "fell nasty" "Where were you?” I ask "Does it matter" you sass back "No" but it does You take a shower Come out like nothings the matter Maybe nothing was, Maybe you were just crying My paranoia has the best of me I apologize a million times for my million flaws you'll never know Deep inside me I know it’s not true But deep inside I make myself believe Can you save me from myself? Or will I get to me first I think I thirst for the hurt But I don't want to be My paranoia has the best of me "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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missmisery61 Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 56 |
Eor I really enjoyed this piece. It's so hard, learning to trust again after having been betrayed. "I think I thirst for the hurt" I have felt that way so many times. As almost to say, we don't deserve to be loved, only hurt. So lord I see you grinnin' must be grand always winning....AIC |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i know all too well, thanks for your complemnt... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Hi Eor, awesome poem! "I apologize a million times for my million flaws you'll never know" -- geez, I remember feeling this way a few years back...this, too, used to be a large component of my poetry. Somehow, I got past it, guess I changed my situation. Keep posting, I'll keep reading!  Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Dude, I love your writings. Everyone I read is just awesome. They are so emotionally inspiring and very wonderful to read. Keep it up, it's great stuff. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Or will I get to me first. The twist of the poem. The write has it should be. The journey, the thought, The premise so sought. great write eor, The deeper the better, but don't lose the letter. Enjoyed. myticpoe [This message has been edited by mysticpoe (07-22-2003 10:56 PM).] |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
You didn't move up? Your not moving up for some reason? As if you care, Take care. mysticpoe [This message has been edited by mysticpoe (07-22-2003 11:00 PM).] |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Isn't it funny how people from our past will remain with us forever , even when we DONT want them to. That the little words they say will haunt our thoughts till we learn to overcome them. That the darken shadows hide our true colors from past pain. Or is it that we hide in the shadows so other can't see our true colors? Too scared to feel the heartache of yet another? Why is it so difficult to trust again? You would think trusting would be a gift. Yet many times it is the scariest thing to ever do. Wonderful Poem.... |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
yes this is true dark kisses, but what ya gonna do huh?...thanks for your comments, and poe...i do care... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
I think I shall stay hidden within the shadows!! Naw , just joking. I have to much to give to stay hidden |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
eor, seeing that you care, here you go. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks poe "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
dude its been a while since ive been on and i got to say youre freaking awesome. keep on g.i.s. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
eor, don't mean to keep bothering you here. But your poem strikes me as new age poetry. If there is such a thing? Again, nice job on this one. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
you know poe, i don't know, maybe there is, maybe i invented it(yeah right), who knows, it is just my style, which i guess is good that you think it is something new, so maybe i am on the right track...thanks. p.s. you are not bothering me at all...i enjoy your words of wisdom "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
I liked this a lot, well done. I agree with everyone else on your unique style. I especially love how sincere this poem is. Tomer |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Very nice. I feel like I was there. That's how it should be. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks, i try... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is a soul~ful dance of senses dear. Could tune the guitar to it any day. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks devina, i do play guitar too, but for some reason i can't write songs, they just never sound write... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
captivating moments in this scene between two and one is often made self-conscious of what was at the root of that 'dark' moment. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Wow....this is so much like life the way it really is...all the way to the doubts of the shower. Yikes! Kinda creepy feeling so inside someones head. WOW again. SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
crying in the shower sounds like something i do. except i'd probably tell where i was. this put me in both positions.. something that isn't often captured enough. I put myself in two pairs of shoes here.. either way, I lost. Great write, as always, eor..you have a way. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank you, all of you!!!! "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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