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Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
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0 posted 2003-07-08 10:39 AM



I’m finding it odd
How a bomb could fit
Into my head
The sun goes out
The day I’m dry
You cannot write
The things I mutter
Words are brittle
Far too weak
I’m finding it strange
That the moon could
Laugh at me
As it is being mocked
By the stars

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mysticpoe
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1 posted 2003-07-08 02:02 PM


Don't take this the wrong way. But I love it when poets search deep and push the envelope with their thoughts. Enjoyed.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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2 posted 2003-07-09 12:41 PM


You know I have those days myself Breathe deeply it gets better, honest.
perseph1ne
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3 posted 2003-07-09 09:41 PM


I love the fact that the moon laughed at you while it was being mocked by the stars. That is a great image and deeper than it seems at first glance because while the moon is laughing at you the stars are laughing at him. There's always someone else out there picking on a weaker person. I suppose it's kinda comforting, because you're never the only one being taunted even if it feels like you are.

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