Dark Poetry #3 |
Pain and Occasions |
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Pain and Occasions She was the one I truly admired. She was the one to awaken my desires. She left me without saying goodbye? Her softness and beauty only a lie? Nothing is left but the pain and occasions to cry. JamesLee June20 2003 |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
G'day... apart from the question marks, I liked this It evoked feeling, which is what a poem should do. Enjoyed :O It's better to be a lion for a day than a sheep all your life. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thanks taramw for the nice responss..I don't like using question marks...but my thoughts kept presenting it to me in this form...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God James . . . Yes . . . I do know xxoo |
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rapturedmist Junior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 30USA |
"Nothing is left but the pain and occasions to cry." This is my favorite line...I'm not really sure why, I guess I just relate better to it. And overall this poem did a great job to evoke emotions, it reminded me of so much. -RM |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A good pain piece, James. *sigh* why, indeed, do we have to go through this kind of pain over and over again? |
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