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Dark Poetry #3

Pain and Occasions

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2003-06-20 08:39 PM

Pain and Occasions

She was the one I truly admired.
She was the one to awaken my desires.
She left me without saying goodbye?
Her softness and beauty only a lie?
Nothing is left but the pain
and occasions to cry.

JamesLee
June20
2003

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2003-06-21 09:33 AM

G'day... apart from the question marks, I liked this

It evoked feeling, which is what a poem should do. Enjoyed :O

It's better to be a lion for a day than a sheep all your life.
-- Sister Elizabeth Kenny

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2003-06-21 09:20 PM

Thanks taramw for the nice responss..I don't like using question marks...but my thoughts kept presenting it to me in this form...James

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-06-22 12:51 PM

God James . . .
Yes . . . I do know
xxoo

rapturedmist
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

4 posted 2003-06-23 02:03 PM

"Nothing is left but the pain
and occasions to cry." This is my favorite line...I'm not really sure why, I guess I just relate better to it. And overall this poem did a great job to evoke emotions, it reminded me of so much.
-RM

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2003-06-23 02:44 PM

A good pain piece, James.
*sigh* why, indeed, do we have to go through this kind of pain over and over again?

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