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poet25
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since 2003-06-17
Posts 18
PE, Canada

0 posted 2003-06-17 08:13 AM


Forget the world as you once knew it
Death is the only grip on reality that I have
I have to make them hate me
For I am destined to die alone
Shrouded in disfigurements
Born to be ugly
A joke to the rest of the world
Harbour your hatred and release it on me
Let become your trinket of pain
Let the razor open my rib cage
To show my cold jet black heart to the world
Alive I am definitely not
A corpse that looks like the rest
Burn my eyes, so no one can stare into those pools of pain
Tear my lips away from my body, so I can no longer have to look at those abominations
A restless soul with no hope
Born without a name
And without a place
Only knowing that death is my world
The place I am trapped
And destined to remain

© Copyright 2003 Adam Wilson - All Rights Reserved
kadafi09
Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 143
California, United States
1 posted 2003-06-17 06:52 PM


You poem made me cry.
Thank You.

Broken
Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
2 posted 2003-06-17 07:42 PM


Brutal emotions told here.
Welcome, and I hope you'll stay with us a while.

~Broken~

Such griefs with such men well agree,
But wherefore, wherefore fall on me ?
To be beloved is all I need,
And whom I love, I love indeed.

S.T.C

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-06-17 08:23 PM


Welcome to Passions.
This is a very well-written first posts. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to the work of the other poets here.
Please check your e-mail for a special greeting.
Ethel/garysgirl
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topsyturveychick
Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus
4 posted 2003-06-17 10:09 PM


So many emotions here that I think all of us can relate to.  I love ur poem.  But remember it's not what is on the outside that counts. It's the heart that people respond to.

I asked God how much he loved me...
He said this much...
And streched out his arms and Died.

**Sunshine**

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
5 posted 2003-06-18 07:46 PM


and a tear befalls my eye...
mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

6 posted 2003-06-18 10:22 PM


I like this poem a lot. The first 8 lines were really, really good. Nice write

mysticpoe

poet25
Junior Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 18
PE, Canada
7 posted 2003-06-20 11:36 AM


Thank you all for the response to my poem it is good to know that a words can reach and effect others
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