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Agi
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since 2003-06-17
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0 posted 2003-06-17 03:24 AM


Walking through the house of emptiness
The loneliness created the picture of your image
A person without a heart
Has stolen my love and trapped me forever
I shared tears of river in my heart,
Hoping they will take me to you
You didn’t see them; you didn’t find the treasure that was in me
You walked through this empty house, as I wasn’t there
Was it so hard to realize the meaning of me?
To feel the pain coming out of my heart,
The pain was my identity, my life, my love.
I still walk around this empty house
On the walls I see
Paintings that I have painted through my life
Oh God, I see my portrait on them,
They are so cold,
That is how my life was
Cold and with no meaning
I tried to brake through these walls,
Hoping to find the freedom of my soul
But I was tired, I couldn’t move
Don’t say this is the end of our end
I don’t want to cry forever
I don’t want to let my heart sink deep into the ocean
I don’t want to talk about it
I just want to leave the anger behind
Stay here and help me
Take my hand and lets walk through the house of emptiness
Let’s make this world ours
Let me tell you that I love you as I have never loved before.



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poet25
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since 2003-06-17
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PE, Canada
1 posted 2003-06-17 08:18 AM


Very good poem, the pain could been seen I was able to notice it etched into the pattern of your words. keep up the good work
nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2003-06-17 01:08 PM


Cold and with no meaning ...

that's it

I walk these halls of emptiness daily, so I know  these words, they are written in my heart.

M

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3 posted 2003-06-17 04:21 PM


Welcome to Passions. This is a very good first post and I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets!
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Ladybug
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since 2003-06-17
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Massachusetts
4 posted 2003-06-18 12:56 PM


Hi Agi, very well-written and emotional.  Great job!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

kadafi09
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since 2003-06-17
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California, United States
5 posted 2003-06-18 06:13 PM


a poem full of true and heartfelt emotions. it is evident that you felt this to your core. well done.
Agi
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since 2003-06-17
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6 posted 2003-06-19 08:34 AM


Hi everyone, thanks for your beautiful responses. It's a nice feeling when you find out that your poems are valued by the others.
Now I seam to have more courage to write and express my feelings even more.

Thank you....

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