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IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14
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Jersey City NJ

0 posted 2003-06-15 08:50 PM


Hey guys, miss me? Prolly not, but here's my first poem like I told Spiritrider in Feelings.
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Looking out the window, dancing on the rain.
Flowing with the streaks, falling with the pain.
A heart so young but so very hard
Left broken and bleeding, forever scarred.
And now, when time calls for me to cry
Suddenly all thoughts and emotions go awry.
Impossible! Impossible! I cannot feel!
It's abhorrible!
How hard can it be to shed a tear?
When it's all I've done in all these years.
Must I be forced to blink the drops
With blinding sand that pound nonstop?
Emotion leaves me when I need her most,
How cruel is she! How very morose!
How cowardly is Strength to flee
When he is beckoned in desperate plea.
The only things that wrap me tight
Are the unknown hands of dark and light.
But bittersweet is the embrace
And I find no wrath, but find no grace.
Swirling free in seas of gray
Without my feelings I'm lost. Astray.
Walking blind till it's too late,
For Judgment Day has sealed my fate.
And only after all these years,
Do freely flow down all my tears.
So look out the window. Gaze upon the rain.
And watch me fade and fall in deep this neverending cycle all over again.

[This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (06-15-2003 10:13 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-06-15 11:30 PM


George, though this is sad, it's a very good poem. I like the way you rhymed it.
Hugs to you  
Ethel

laurie
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 153
canada, ontario
2 posted 2003-06-16 08:40 AM


it's good, flame.. l like. ethels' right... the rhyming meters interesting... good.
lve felt like this more than once before, so l know how hard it is, and frightening - good luck.
laurie.

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