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Dark Poetry #3

Blood Gone Blue

JenniX
Junior Member

since 2003-06-05

Posts 29

0 posted 2003-06-11 10:58 AM

Trapped beneath the moss covered ground,
surrounded by deaths darkness,
pushing my way to the surface,
fist over fist,
moving with a clouded mind.
Losing my mind,
losing my life,
losing my breath,
from my heart,
deprived of loves embrace filled with fear.
My blood is blue,
from the cruelty in my soul.
I am untrustworthy, evil.
For I will destroy you,
if you trust me.
I trry to love, but am unable;
my blood has gone cold,
blue,
from the hatred in my heart,
my soul.

princessdani3122
Junior Member

since 2003-05-14

Posts 18

1 posted 2003-06-11 12:08 PM

I can relate to this , very good

danielle

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

2 posted 2003-06-11 06:37 PM

i can really feel you on that one...love really sucks sometimes ;(

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

Eddie
New Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 8

3 posted 2003-06-12 02:40 PM

Oh man that was really something.
Love can really mess you up.
I can really relate to that.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2003-06-12 02:55 PM

This is some cool poetry... I really like your first line. It's hard to draw the reader in like that right off the bat, but you did it for me. I wish I could think of first lines that effective... heh...

Nice writing, Jenni... keep sharing with the Dark Passions crowd. You're an important part.

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

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