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Chris-
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since 2003-06-09
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0 posted 2003-06-09 01:10 AM


an empty god
runnning through a field
looking for sod
to help his wounds heal
so he burns a village
and finds his ointment
he's plundered and pillaged
with such dissapointment

and so he wonders to himself

where are my followers,
where are my sheep,
why won't my sUn come out and play,
why do my people not wake from sleep

the skies begin to black
as the rain begins to pour
the god in tears lies on his back
cursing the heavens ready for war

whoever has done this
no matter who you are
you will pay with your soul
he screamed from afar

and as he gazed down at his broken kingdom he thought,
the killer was me, he cried distraught
and so with one burning fist,
the one he used to turn his kingdom to myth
he silenced himself,  setting exsistence adrift

*I posted this in the main forums and i didn't think it would do to well there but here i think it is a little more apropriate i guess, so enjoy unless you already enjoyed then i hope you liked it*

[This message has been edited by Chris- (06-09-2003 01:37 PM).]

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laurie
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 153
canada, ontario
1 posted 2003-06-09 01:38 AM


l do like. an interesting take on god, and religion...
thanx for the good read.
laurie. btw, are you allowed to post 1 poem in 2 forums?

Chris-
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since 2003-06-09
Posts 52

2 posted 2003-06-09 01:42 AM


i dont no i'm new to these forums and i didn't read the legal stuff, no ones really looking at it anywhere anyways so i guess it doesn't really matter too much
laurie
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 153
canada, ontario
3 posted 2003-06-09 01:49 AM


ah... well, u might want to look into that, cause l got a silly feeling it is... anyway, l did like hte poems, (read em both) so yeah...
laurie.

mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

4 posted 2003-06-09 09:32 AM


You wrote a very interesting story here. You should continue the meaning w/another poem Part II.

mysticpoe

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