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Tomer
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0 posted 2003-04-30 01:08 AM



My eyes stared vacantly into the horizon,
seeing a shadow of myself through her chizzled smile,
yet finding myself guessing beyond her ivory skin.

She sinks her feet into my belly,
seamously catching my soft intentions,
yet she cocoones me into her deception.

I retain my pride,
prideful of my obsession,
but muzzled by her rosy bloom.

A lingering footstep hardens,
creeping beyond the staircase of my walls,
only to see her tracks shadow her reflection.

I reside in my gardenous delight,
ignoring her manipulative disguise,
keeping my gleeful smile under wrap.

If she could only know how I dreamt,
How I sulked with her body,
together in a maze of fruitful delight.

She is beyond my reach,
a star without a frame,
only my soul seeks redemption through her name.

I lay in her tracks,
loosly calling her name,
finding her enchanted in the heart of my belly.


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1 posted 2003-04-30 01:21 PM


well done piece
j-oh-E
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2 posted 2003-05-01 12:55 PM


You have a great talent for putting images in a reader's head.  I don't know, maybe it's just me, but this poem doesn't seem finished for some reason?  Did you mean it that way, or do you plan to add some closure?
Tomer
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3 posted 2003-05-02 10:14 PM


The poem isn't completely finished, but at the same time I thought it was a decent ending to leave off at for now..

Thanx for the response!

Tomer

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