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tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30
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0 posted 2003-04-19 08:49 PM


she's alone in her battle
battling a disease
she never eats
she always sees
they don't know her
nobody does
she seems so happy
she'll never tell
she won't be hurt
again
back off
go away
she shows no emotion
use and abuse her
walk all over her
she can't be touched
she's gone inside
to that place of pain
nobody can touch her
she's never herself
she uses her bones
to push reality away
she's so sick
so skinny
but her bones
save her
no one says
how ugly she looks
all she wants
is them to notice her
so she can quit being invisible
tears fall on her cheeks
walk down the hall
a nameless face
she looks so fragile
and her scars
but you can't touch her...
you can try
but she doesn't let people in
she uses her sharp bones
her delicate hip bones
to push you away and
suddenly
she's gone...
and her bones
kept her that way

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

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tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30
Posts 87

1 posted 2003-04-20 10:01 AM



i guess nobody really wanted to read these... alas. hmmm... i would really appreciate some comments on this poem in particular... thanks guys and gals

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

2 posted 2003-04-22 01:48 AM


I just found this and I think it's a great depiction of anorexia,  and really, any person's struggle to "fit in". (is it you, I wonder?) I think it should go in the book.  Go back and edit and see if you can check the book.....
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-04-22 05:36 PM


torn:

This IS brilliant - ahhhh I do know this - my best friend was anorexic and you just brought her back to life here through your words . . .  quite the amazing write
xxoo  

qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
4 posted 2003-04-22 07:22 PM


WoW! This is very vivid!! I hope it wasn't a personal experience--that's a scary disease to be caught up in!!


ELMO

tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30
Posts 87

5 posted 2003-04-23 09:59 PM


hey littlewing, i will look into your site, i am pretty busy as of late, but i will definitely check into that! thanks
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