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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity

0 posted 2003-03-01 09:35 AM



Sudden clouds hover
like black crows
over my head,
obscuring the sun
darkening my mind.
Words as sharp
as a butcher’s knife
cut my serenity
into pieces
bleeding to death.
I yearn for
nothingness,
stopping my breath.
I glide into silence,
erasing connections.
Once I had felt loved.
I faintly remember
submerged tunes
of nightingales.


Margherita

© Copyright 2003 Margherita Rueger - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2003-03-01 04:48 PM


"Once I had felt loved.
I faintly remember."
enjoyed...James

majnu
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2 posted 2003-03-01 08:18 PM


great image:

Words as sharp
as a butcher’s knife
cut my serenity
into pieces
bleeding to death.


the old saying: stick ans stones... etc. is incorrect - words can be like knives, and cut extremely deeply.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

GG
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since 2002-12-03
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Lost in thought
3 posted 2003-03-02 10:34 AM


deep and graphic I like it.

Well done!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Margherita
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Eternity
4 posted 2003-03-02 01:21 PM


Thank you friends for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Sometimes darkness enfolds us painfully .... thanks to God at the end of the tunnel the light waits ...
Love, Margherita

littlewing
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5 posted 2003-08-24 11:07 AM


Margherita . . . this is beautiful!
xxoo

SharaRose
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6 posted 2003-08-24 12:38 PM




SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
7 posted 2004-03-16 09:31 AM


oh my sweet Margherita, this hurts so much
AlCowie
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8 posted 2011-05-16 12:16 PM


Clarity and profundity in poetry of obscurity and gravity. Nice
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