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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

0 posted 2003-02-23 01:47 AM



Broken and torn
Through my pain
I'm reborn

Through these eyes
Filled with fire
You're an object

To scorn

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-02-23 06:23 PM


Glad you weren't looking at me.
ouch

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
2 posted 2003-02-23 08:06 PM


Very early write........can you tell I was a difficult teen?
Jason

SPIRIT
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3 posted 2003-02-24 01:49 AM


Interesting little piece this.
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2003-02-27 04:38 PM


Nice writing...James
JP
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5 posted 2003-03-09 05:06 PM


Yeah, "ouch"  is right.

Well writ, though harsh....

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

majnu
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6 posted 2003-03-09 07:25 PM


"rage be now your song, immortal one,"

nice write.

-majnu
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Ina
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7 posted 2003-03-10 06:47 PM


this is good,like others have said, "ouch". short and too the point..awesome

Regina

"heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello

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