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MissKlarmic
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since 2003-02-20
Posts 70
Canada,N.S

0 posted 2003-03-12 10:35 PM



The hurt i feel seems to reappear whenever people are near.
These tears i cry seem one step closer to the deaths im about to die
The thoughts in my head of love of life of all the more reasons to be mislead
The friends im loosing to time to broken hearts  the closing
The love passing through me by the cold dampness of the home
The hearts im breaking with every word, th elivesim breaking with the touch, my own i seem to be slowly taking.
The thoughts that make me weep , loose all my sleep digging deep for the emotional bar set to high.
To meet my fears would be an option, To run scared a tried and untrue fact.To see these thoughts these words in my eyes
alls seen by me
Is a miserable little girl lost in despise.

© Copyright 2003 Lesley Anne Crowe - All Rights Reserved
j0n4th4n
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since 2003-03-11
Posts 94

1 posted 2003-03-14 01:54 PM


i hope you are alright

your poem is difficult to understand and read, partly because there are some typing errors
but it sounds mature enough
try re-writing it, with shorter lines

i wish you happiness and peace

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