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Eromyna
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Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2003-01-07 09:47 AM


I will burn the lies you told me,
build a pyre to the self-proclaimed.
I am not the soul you sold me.
I will not go quietly into the flame.
I am a burning rebel.
Contradiction is my name.
I play along and lose to you but,
in the end, you are my game.
Classify me; label me,
and set me somewhere to decay.
Quantify my qualities
and rearrange them on display.
Daddy made me bitter-sweet.
Mother makes me bleed.
I'm a nameless voodoo doll,
and all the pain returns to me.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
1 posted 2003-01-07 06:08 PM


ouch! and yikes! this is a powerful write.
A very good one too.
I hope things get better for you in the mess of all going on. Your strong enough, hang on.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Sikanda
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since 2002-10-08
Posts 54

2 posted 2003-01-09 02:14 PM


I really like this one Eromyna. You are very talented. I look forward to reading more of your work!!



I will burn the lies you told me,
                                           build a pyre to the self-proclaimed.
                                               I am not the soul you sold me.
                                        
I will not go quietly into the flame.


Love it!!

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3 posted 2003-01-10 06:15 PM


cool u are talented I hope u will continue to write here

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

angelfriend
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since 2003-01-11
Posts 52
Michigan USA
4 posted 2003-01-11 12:51 PM


Wow. That is very real and evocative. I feel your pain. Great poem.
WinterWren
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5 posted 2003-01-11 11:04 PM


This was a really great poem, no it is wonderful! Wow! I usually just stay in the teen poetry, but Im feeling dark tonight so I figured I'd visit here, and Im glad I did. I can really relate to your poem, well done!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
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Pheonix, AZ, USA
6 posted 2003-01-12 11:37 AM


Thank you all for commenting. I write partially for myself, but mostly  because I love knowing that people enjoy reading my poems. Your encouragement is what keeps me going.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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