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WhileIWasGone
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0 posted 2002-12-03 07:58 AM



Lover, it's bare ground between naval and chest.
Just are a sunset's mottled pastels
settling on your nightstand in chintz of gold.
Tomorrow will have softer colors than today,
pictures of children whose ecru faces stain a winter sky.
Our Hansel and Grethel of bedknob and broom watch
as the hour fizzles with bromide or ether or sin.
Let it be a personal messiah, glimpsed and spiraling
out of one thing; a star, a follicle, a window opening
to a single tear that when touched...nails the eyes shut.
Harsh the polemics of our sensual world,
each fold a nub's rind, the nut and bolt that prattles in rancor.
Only the bedpan, syrup and sheets. Only tomorrow slighted
by yesterday. Only a sliver of lips mistaken for promise
tricks ones mind into believing our sunset, at first,
was but a blush in the corset of a rose.



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just dreaming
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1 posted 2002-12-03 10:28 AM


Great poem, Your really talented!
Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2002-12-03 01:32 PM


Only a sliver of lips mistaken for promise
tricks ones mind into believing our sunset, at first,
was but a blush in the corset of a rose
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Outstanding metaphors in this one. You layer so much within each line. I will come back again later today, to let more of this sink into my veins. Kacy

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3 posted 2002-12-18 12:20 PM


Blew my poor mind. Wow...
Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2002-12-21 02:16 PM


You've been gone for awhile. Hope all is well.
Happy holidays, hope to see you in here again soon.

GOlDsparklESS
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5 posted 2002-12-24 06:17 PM


complex, stunning- you shame the idiotic fluff that passes for poetry nowadays..
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