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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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0 posted 2002-11-23 08:26 AM




carried off
on this restless night,
the wrath of the wind
screams
of loves torment,
as its chimes
play in a sweet paradox
outside your
guarded gate,
cant you hear
my sweet voice
tonight,
calling to you
through
your window
of detachment?

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wranx
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1 posted 2002-11-23 11:20 PM


This is really very, very good.

I hear a storm coming.

Ed

[This message has been edited by wranx (11-23-2002 11:20 PM).]

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2002-11-24 01:02 AM


Enjoyed...James
inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2002-11-24 08:00 AM



yes, ed,
but will he hear the storm?

wranx
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4 posted 2002-11-24 10:37 AM


He will, no doubt. But, will he listen....


Ed

fractal007
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5 posted 2002-11-24 11:01 PM


Neat poem.  It's almost as if you're combining the speaker and the wind with its various screams and chimes.  I loved the nice touch of calling into the window at the end.  It connects this really vivid imagery to some physical event.  This is definitely going into my library!

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2002-11-25 06:53 AM




thanks fracta,

for getting this..........really

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2002-12-18 12:39 PM


Both sexy and forlorn. I like that you can hear the chimes buried below the rage of wind.
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