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Three Little Bears
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since 2002-10-23
Posts 13
Wisconsin, U.S.

0 posted 2002-11-03 07:54 PM


Potholes dissolving
into muddy canyons,
pulled wheels
to the ditch.

I remember everything:
the road and the car that
carried me, the man;

and the way his hand tasted
as he muffled my cries.

A culvert's flow
rinsed blood,
but couldn't dress
naked skin.

I don't know who found me.

In a white room:
nurses hid raining eyes
and a plastic surgeon
told me his hands
didn't have the magic
I needed.


© Copyright 2002 Andrea Defoe - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2002-11-03 08:43 PM


Welcome to the family. I actually read this on your website before you posted it. I was as struck by it now as I was just now. It's a gentle poem about a violent act. It's so well done! I look forward to reading a lot more from you.
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
2 posted 2002-11-03 09:04 PM


Your pen has a good touch for this sort of work. Not graphic, but still gets the message across. Enjoyed.

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

Three Little Bears
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since 2002-10-23
Posts 13
Wisconsin, U.S.
3 posted 2002-11-03 09:34 PM


Poet deVine and Temptress,
  Thank you both for your kind words, I'm so glad you liked this poem.
  ~Andrea~

Moonlight Romeo
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since 2001-09-10
Posts 982
The heart of you
4 posted 2002-11-04 08:45 AM


I too, found this a very gentle poem.  You tackle the subject matter very well.  

Thank you, and welcome to Dark Passions.  

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What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Three Little Bears
Junior Member
since 2002-10-23
Posts 13
Wisconsin, U.S.
5 posted 2002-11-04 09:59 AM


Romeo,
  Thank you for the warm welcome and for replying to this poem.
I'm glad you liked it.
  ~Andrea

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