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Amaranthine
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since 2002-10-06
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0 posted 2002-10-06 03:06 PM



Mine

You are mine
Steel flashes from
my eyes

Cuts down others
who want you

Psychic blood flows
as wine
to my lips

Your place is by me
don't forget-

You own me.

© Copyright 2002 Brian Jones - All Rights Reserved
Succubus
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since 2002-09-30
Posts 82
Canada, Ontario
1 posted 2002-10-06 03:37 PM


All Hail to the Cobra Queen.  I Welcome you my Devine Servant of Evil.
Amazing Piece my Sweet.  I look forward to seeing a lot more of your work.
Talk to You Soon,
Love - Succubus(The Spider Queen)

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2002-10-06 10:44 PM


Welcome to Passions. I think you're going to fit right in here. Please check your email for a special greeting.
Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2002-10-07 12:24 PM


Welcome to this poetryland, where greeneyed monsters can always find some companionship.
bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-10-07 12:05 PM


Intense! Welcome, Amaranthine.

My favorite part? That the poem seems to be about the narrator being in control,
and yet, at the end, she says
"You own me."

Loved it!

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
5 posted 2002-10-07 06:19 PM


sometimes control is best harnessed when it is out of ones hands...i like this poem a lot...eor:-)
Amaranthine
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since 2002-10-06
Posts 61
ON Canada
6 posted 2002-10-12 03:00 AM


When is control ever in the hands of the controller, who still is owned by tru emotion?
In my own case,
never, flog me
flay me
I wish i could say 'I love it, give me more'

-whore

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2002-10-23 05:46 AM


Enjoyed...James
Kouranis
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since 2002-10-24
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8 posted 2002-10-24 02:35 PM


Very nice work Amaranthine. I want more, and remember:"Darkness is not necessarily evil and light is not always good. Beware of those who hide behind the light!"

"We are those who never sleep,we are those who always dream. Follow the heart."
  

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
9 posted 2002-10-24 10:48 PM


Nice touch in ending such a possesive poem with submissiveness.

Will be sure to look for more from you.
Welcome to Passsions In Poetry.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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