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Chameleon
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since 2002-08-07
Posts 99
Australia

0 posted 2002-09-27 09:33 AM



I am sinking somewhere beneath,
walking on clouds.
Spare me your pretty angelic eyes.
breathe me, sigh, allow me to rise.

If you cannot see,
I am rising,
If you cannot see  
Iam sinking somewhere beneath,
If you cannot see,
Iam rising past your christian Utopia.

Invite me to leave,
spare me degrees.
Sigh.


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bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-09-27 03:34 PM


Chameleon,
That was a nice big ball
of contradictions and beauty,
floating.

Colors changin',
like your name.

eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2002-09-27 05:06 PM


Spare me your pretty angelic eyes...nice wording, with that line i can see excatly what you mean, it really made me think...eor
PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02
Posts 439
I am everywhere
3 posted 2002-09-28 01:44 PM


This reminded me of bread...

Anyway, but this is a very good poem.
Your lines are different than anything I've ever read, but I like that very much.

Continure to write...
and I'll continue to listen.

~Sara

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