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Play the Victim
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Play the Victim |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... 
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Play the victim, play the victim, come on baby, play the victim. Feel the (edit/edit) which abounds; let it master you, become the slave. It's all roundabout. Come on baby, play the victim. Life will be cruel, sense the lies, see the facade for what it is. Slap. You're it, chase the dream given to you, nothing is truly yours. Play the victim, play the victim, won't you baby? Just play the victim. Differing people, differing levels of pain and suffering, peace and love. Work toward the future or dwell on the past. Overwhelmed by the present, taken aback by it all. Right places, right places, right places for it all. Walk through that door; what do you see? Play the victim, play the victim, oh baby, oh baby, won't you let me see you play the victim. End possibilities. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling...this sounds like ME yelling at ME. Grin...love the message of it, and? I say hold auditions for a new star of this play...  Love the attitude in this. |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
I'm 'Overwhelmed by the present' This startled me at first, and then blew me away! Great job. ~Sara |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Titus, This is like Depeche Mode's Master and Servant crashing headlong into People Are People, with a touch of Stripped and some Somebody. In short -- AWESOME!!!! But what's up with the (edit/edit)? |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Mikey, if I could tell you, I wouldn't have to edit it.  LMAO The reason for two edits was to show a word with two syllables,and or the length of the word. Sincerely, Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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Eden New Member
since 2002-09-28
Posts 5 |
I liked the edit bit as I read it a few times and put different words in the 'edit' part each time.The feel of the poem changes each time you imagine a new word there... interactive poems! But yeah, in more than one way I can so relate to that poem today...good stuff! ~ Sweet s u r r e n d e r ~ |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
My goodness, you have crafted a wonderful poem! I really enjoyed the rather quick flow of the rhythm of this poem, as well as the barbed wit you managed to convey so well through it. The idea of playing the victim is [if I dare say] sexualized in a way that adds much to the extremely satirical quality of this poem. I'll definitely be putting it in my library. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Thank you.  Sincerely, Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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