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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Your blue image Has been traced within Layers of my awareness Merely an outline Inscribed indelibly deep Into the corium Of my consciousness An emphatic ache The needling of pining Pigments, pricked precisely With dulcet dyes And now, I fear I shall ever bear This faint tattoo Of you ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Ed. I enjoyed the piece and the idea... good strong imagery and a progression of thought that takes the reader to a place they can draw from the poem what they personally wish to. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Passions sort of is a tattoo,a scar to some. Though, I'm sure this wasn't about Passions. It's just, the mention of blue. I'm glad you're still writing, Ed. Yr Pictures at an exhibition is one of my all-time favorites. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks squirrel dude. And no, didn't have passions in mind. But, in reading this through a "stranger's" eyes, I can see that it is yet another generic metaphor for...a memory? And yes, still writing. Just slow going. Trying to say something (don't even know what) and writing dreck. Maybe should have stayed awake in English. ~Ed |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
this photograph say mind's eye has seen the glory..... and Ed? frankly? what you write? I'm glad you snored in English prolly just mussed ya up nohow  brain |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'm with brian, here. To heck with English. We all need to learn Wranxian (for fun and profit) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"dulcet eyes" that's one of those perfect phrases that will stick with me forever--sigh, now I am also tattoed by her--and I don't even KNOW her! gawd, I'm nuts... what a gentle heart, Ed. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Simply beautiful... ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
personally i thihk you language is absoutly beautiful... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This leaves quite a beautiful aftertaste, Ed. Brilliantly put together with a lasting effect. Much enjoyed. Thank you. ~AF~ "It is far more difficult to murder a phantom than a reality." - Virginia Woolf |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Though I haven't replied to most, I have been reading you're poetry. (thought you might want to know that. )Most of what I have read of you- I cannot relate, but this ... this is wonderful. Each line made me feel ... up until the tattoo part. Which was a very good touch, whether it reminded me of anything or not. Heh. (and don't think I'm ignorant or anything, I know that other people's poems may not strike home. But I like it when it does...) But I did enjoy this very much. Continue.... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks all for the read, and reply. And for Sara, I'm flattered that you read these scribblings, but relating to it? Don't worry about it, you will. (I have about 4 decades on you.) Likewise, I have some trouble understanding work written outside my own reality, and like you, get what I can from it. ~Ed |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Exaggerating, or are you 53? HEH. take care, Sara |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
well, I guess I was exaggerating a bit. I'm only 50! See? different realities. ~Ed |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
I was right. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed, you would have been so bored in English anyhow. Besides, you would have ended up teaching the class outside of class and we would have a bunch of Wranxians roaming free right now. (hit me later) Eyes, yes beautiful eyes . . . a bittersweet tattoo indeed the needling of pining but I like the twist of the blue pages Mikey Lord knows this will be tattooed as well. xxoo |
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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
ooh ooh, i wanna be a Wranxian too!! Thinking of building a school?  |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Wow! Everytime you write something it just makes me go "Wow." I think Ill have some of that Wranxian teaching too GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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Annie Junior Member
since 2003-07-23
Posts 42Seattle, WA |
You know you really need to look into getting an Agent, or submit your work to a publishing house, or magazines yourself. You are damn good! "Well I know, these voices must be my soul." -Dave Matthews- |
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