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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2002-09-14 12:47 PM



The sweet words are gone now
vitriol flows from this writer’s pen
too many shoulders turned made
this spine too straight to unbend

Smiles turned to bitter grins
and rainbows turned cumulus
flowers withered on their stem
blood of promise turned to dust

Whispers heard behind the scenes
she’s not the same as she used to be
groups gathered to watch her stumble
smiling in silent cacophony

Weary eyes adjust to the bitter dusk
even the sun is glad for the night
this poet sears in the bright of day
and turns to the hardened dark to write



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fractal007
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1 posted 2002-09-14 01:14 PM


You've tied the images in this poem together well.  The light turning to darkness, the sun being glad to set on the land, the sweet words being gone.  I like the way you've described what seems to be an age now moving away to make room for some other era or time.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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2 posted 2002-09-14 01:29 PM


Thank you. I've lost my 'light words' I think.
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3 posted 2002-09-14 01:45 PM


smiling...you've not lost your light words...you just have to be smacked around a bit! (and I'm waiting for someone to yell at me for that suggestion, giggle) It's okay folks, I kissed her first!

The poem is so sad, it's hard for me to say that I love it, but I love seeing you here. Stick around a bit, it's much more fun to play hide-n-go-seek in the DARK!

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4 posted 2002-09-16 12:44 PM


Sharon,
This place isn't *that* hardened.
I'm glad to see you here, though.
I hope you'll post more.
I miss you.

Mike

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5 posted 2002-09-16 08:19 PM


Beautiful....enjoyed very much!


DeaDiAmore

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6 posted 2002-09-16 10:15 PM


A melancholy reflection on life...sad but true...
Poet deVine
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7 posted 2002-09-16 10:17 PM


Thank you all again. You've made me smile!
Moonlight Romeo
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8 posted 2002-09-19 12:24 PM


It is always amazing when the dark shows more than the light.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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9 posted 2002-09-19 04:54 PM


ooooh someone else dabbling in dark I think I do it too often

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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10 posted 2002-09-21 11:54 PM


Always good to read you... and try to keep the smile
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