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Encarta
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world

0 posted 2002-09-13 04:14 PM

Life or Death
By
Matt

Tell me, where's the light
In this eternal night
That seeps into my mind
And brings darkness to all I find

Tell me, where's the rain
For I feel the pain
And I hear the thunder
As my life it plunders

"It's my life" I say in confusion
Not knowing it to be an illusion
For I have yet to live at all
So how can my life stall

Yet stall it has, between death and birth
Never again shall I walk on earth
Nor can I smell the air
Or live my life without a care

Tell me, where's the pain
For I see the rain
As it floods my eyes
While I whisper, "goodbye"

Tell me, where's the night
All I see now is light
Is this the end
Or did my life just begin

"They do not love that do not show their love.”-Shakespeare

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2002-09-13 08:13 PM

Wow! This is an impressive transition you have here. I especially loved the way you apparently personified the world described in the first four stanzas, in bidding it farewell.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-09-14 11:08 PM

This is awesome. I like the way you let your feelings flow.

Cold hands means a warm heart

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

3 posted 2002-09-15 09:42 PM

The way you wrote it almost convinced me that this was completely about death, but the ending through me off. That was awesome! Thought-provoking and seems to have lots of realistic emotions (i.e. very confusing!!). Excellent piece!!!!

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

4 posted 2002-09-16 12:03 PM

This was very interesting for I share the same thoughts at this point in my life. Well done!

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-09-16 12:26 PM

Encarta,
Exactly:
The end of one journey
is the beginning of another.

Mike

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