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Harmony
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0 posted 2002-09-12 08:04 PM




Can they tell

I often wonder if others can see inside of me,
Can they see the sadness, hurt and misery,
do they see the years of pain i've learned to hide so well,
can they see the scars of life,
I wonder can they tell.
can they see i cannot cry or show just how i feel,
do they see my perfect facade, can they tell that its not real,

I often wonder if others can see inside of me,
i wonder if they closely looked what is it they would see,
would they see a childs scaredeyes alert and staringback,
would they be able to tell, about the love this childlacked,

I often wonder if others can see inside of me,


Michelle k s

(Harmony)

© Copyright 2002 Michelle KS. - All Rights Reserved
WhileIWasGone
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1 posted 2002-09-12 09:12 PM


Nice work....enjoyed.

DeaDiAmore

D edgar Grey
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2 posted 2002-09-12 11:45 PM


Mildly disturbing: I'm going through the same thing right now. Whenever I'm around my friends or family, I pretend to be all "happy and joyful," even though on the inside I'm screaming and crying and laughing at their stupidity and dying all at once. My greatest fear is that they know that I am being fake (I have told two or three of my closest friends) and that they're simply laughing at me for it. Somewhat paranoid, but I am at the age of insecurity. Nevertheless, your work hit me right where it hurts the most. Powerful...
Harmony
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3 posted 2002-09-13 05:26 AM


Hi d edgar i am sorry if you found the poem disturbing but i feel  like many others  poetry is a way to express the most inner thoughts and feelings, its away for me to express what i would otherwise keep inside.
I understand the insecurity thing too i am there also but i feel it is all part of the journey i am on.
Thankyou for your feedback
take care

Harmony
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4 posted 2002-09-13 05:29 AM


Thank you whileiwasgone for your feedback i appreciate it very much.
bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-09-13 04:17 PM


Michelle,
I wanna hear Avril
belt this one out.

(loved it)

Mikey

fractal007
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6 posted 2002-09-13 08:09 PM


A good poem about our tendency to hide our pain.  It often disturbs me to see how common this is in writing here, and how common I myself do it.  

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Zall
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since 2002-08-25
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7 posted 2002-09-14 03:27 AM


Heartfelt words harmony

Zall

anya
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8 posted 2002-09-14 04:43 AM


yes this peice is so full of emotion, you put your feelings down very eloquently here, well done and I hope to read more of your poems!
anya

Harmony
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9 posted 2002-09-15 06:42 AM


Thank you all for your feed back, i really appreciate it.
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