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Dark Poetry #3

My Mind

suicidal_monkey
New Member

since 2002-09-05

Posts 1

0 posted 2002-09-05 03:22 PM

The world goes dark
As light fades out
I lose my will
There is no doubt

My tortured soul
Cries out in pain
As my mind goes
To be insane

There’s no hope now
I’ve gone too far
Inside my mind
I see no star

Now I’m dead
And no one cares
Inside my grave
You cannot stare

~*Mike*~

Stryder
Junior Member

since 2002-06-22

Posts 29
Silent Hill

1 posted 2002-09-05 04:08 PM

This poem is hopeless, depressing, dejecting and has suicide written all over it.

"Two wrongs don't make a right,
but three rights make a left."

[This message has been edited by Stryder (09-05-2002 04:09 PM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-05 04:27 PM

I took it as metaphor, since it'd be pretty hard for a dead person to write and post a poem. I also see it as a slow constricting, a numbness of feeling to try and prepare yourself not for living, but for survival.

Or, maybe it is about suicide. And if so, the post will have to be removed due to PIP's guidelines.

Blah blah blah, etc. Welcome to Dark, s_m.

Mikey

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

3 posted 2002-09-06 07:44 PM

I like it,

It is what it is,

Darkness, despair,

Poems dont depress me, life depresses me!

Zall

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

4 posted 2002-09-07 01:17 AM

Nice style, s_m, a good write.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

5 posted 2002-09-07 06:48 PM

Mildly aggravating...one of my favourites writings was removed because of the guidelines. Anyway, I really enjoyed this piece. It was haunting; yet tranquil. An odd combination, but certainly perfect for this! Thanks!

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