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D edgar Grey
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since 2002-08-21
Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

0 posted 2002-09-02 09:29 PM


Open your eyes to darkness
Fill your mind with worry
Is fear devouring you body?
Your soul lays exposed to the world

In a moment that blinds you completely
Your life has now been changed
What you feel now is temporary
But will linger in your mind forever

You scream with freedom
Is that what you really want?
You know that an answer
Is not always fair or just

Frustration mixes with nervousness
Impatience is now in control
Stress wracks you mind and soul
Weariness claims you body

In a moment that blinds you completely
Your life has now been changed
What you feel now is temporary
But will linger in your mind forever

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Sorry. I for some reason have this unusual obsession with innocence and purity, but I'm trying to not write about it so much. Lemme know what you think! Thanks.

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bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-09-03 12:01 PM


DeG
I used to fixate,
once when,
on purity, innocence
and madonna/whore ideals.
Then I realized,
we all have the capacity
for both
at once.

Insousciant Mike

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
2 posted 2002-09-04 01:11 AM


I too have this innate draw to purity...(grin)
But, your re-gression to the "What you feel now is temporary But will linger in your mind forever" was so admirably and strategically placed, that I was abruptly contemplative, not unlike an immoveable wall hit by an unstoppable ball...
(enigma answered: I, like the ball, spun in place...moving at a fast pace of mentality, but stuck in the moment...) Great write!

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