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Match
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0 posted 2002-09-01 09:00 PM



Why are all you so blind?
Don't you see the world goes in circles.
Everyday the same things happen.
Another person dies,
From someone elses lies.
---------------------------
Im not sure if it's done

~*Azi*~

© Copyright 2002 Ashley Schell - All Rights Reserved
Purity
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since 2001-11-20
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Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2002-09-01 11:13 PM


Indeed, indeed. I totally relate, even wrote about it (reference:"Ask About This"). Excellent train of thought here. Good job!
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-09-01 11:43 PM


Seems done to me, Match.
Less is more in this case. Good musing here.

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2002-09-02 12:01 PM


If everything goes around in circles, then there are no beginnings and no ends, so you've answered your own question regarding whether your poem is finished or not!

Interesting little poem. Made me think!

Linda

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4 posted 2002-09-02 01:04 PM


smiling, I like this much...circles as symbols of divinity as well, the astrological symbol for SUN being a circle with a dot in the center--which made me ponder the saying, "The only place where time stands still is the center." See? you are quite right, each thought leads to another...smiles to you. I was wrong about liking this--I LOVE this.
Match
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5 posted 2002-09-02 02:42 PM


Thank you all, I've decided that it is done

~*Azi*~

bsquirrel
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6 posted 2002-09-03 12:20 PM


Ah, but the scariest part, Match?
People die everyday for other people's truths,
too.
*shiver*

Mike

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7 posted 2002-09-04 09:06 AM


Very good once again.  Enjoyed immensly!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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