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nothing (a brooding ramble)
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nothing (a brooding ramble) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Nothing right now could exact a smile from these eyes nor these lips save for your voice and the hunger to have you is so dire right now that it could easily be a cruelty smile aimed at whatever pleasures you could seek by loving me in return. I am teased by scurrying shadows tonight, My Love and if you haven't a hand to hold out in patience then don't dare it. Don't step into the quicksand if you have't the strength to pull us both out because it is night within my soul if only for moments and one blink of light could pierce me making mad secrets jump off the walls at me. I am obliterated lying here staring at a blank spot burning its way through the grey that gives way to blackness and I look damn good in black. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
i was brooding yesterday... i stare into the dark when i brood too, and i think if i wrote as i stared, it might sound like this. enjoyed this much. especially the part about how only a blink of light would only make the little things inside jump around. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh You sound like hurt. Hugs...you've been doing some good writtin' lately lady..  K |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Thanks, you two, for the replies to my poetry as of late. K..you really don't know what your comment means to me. I have had little faith in my writing these days. ((HUGS)) "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The last line was a zinger--and I love last line "punches" too. And yanno, what? Everytime I read you now, I can hear your voice in my mind (People, this lady recites NICE) We'll have to ask the Alicat to set up another chat room thing-- Wonderful writing...as always you--it's like whip-stitching thought (oooh...) there ya go, a challenge for you! "whip-stitching thought" grin...gonna go post that in the challenge forum...and I know, I know, I still owe ya the one about the wind...believe it or not? I'm still thinking on that.  *It would help if the wind would BLOW for some inspiration, huh?* cackle |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Wonderful piece! I enjoyed it much! -Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'm so taking the challenge, Sen. And Temptress, I love your words. They remind me, and help me see. Mike |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I'm tempted to say, no, I'm going to say, you "do look damn good in black"!----I love your photo (and this rambling gem)! Linda |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
It would seem that black makes the poet. And that grey makes the lover. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Not such a ramble, just a fine, fine read. And thanks for your unending support of my own scribbles ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhh Jenn . . . I have stumbled upon a beauty here xxoo |
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