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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-08-28 06:49 PM


This
is an
after-hour's dance--
I toe the soot
and sway alone
beyond last call
for alcohol
I grab the broom
and lock the door
and etta james
(she waits for me)
faithfully
behind B4--
"At Last..."
(I am awake in sleep)
I draw a ve'-ve'
in the floor...
I brush the green
and blow the ash--
I count the sticks
and look for cracks.
I empty trays of cigarettes--
each butt in testify--regret...
I turn the neon down real low...
at last, at last, I can dance slow.
All the loneliness is gone--
at last, my love has come along.


© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Dragon Mistress
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1 posted 2002-08-28 07:35 PM


Aww, I liked this a lot!

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
Posts 710
in the interzone now
2 posted 2002-08-28 07:43 PM


There's something so great about an empty place of work. Unfortunately, my store never closes, but there are the hour-long lulls without customers, and that's the only time things get peaceful and I can remember why I'm willing to work so late after all.

Beautiful poem.

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
3 posted 2002-08-28 10:54 PM


I'm no stranger to "beyond last call" meseff.
I always liked the look and sounds of empty streets, while sitting alone in my bar. Lookin' out the front window n' havin' a quiet one (Granddad ~ rocks)

You put me in that same mood.

Thanks,

~Ed

brian sites
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4 posted 2002-08-28 11:03 PM


oh yes oh YES
when she hits that
AAAAAATTT   LLLLAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSTTTTTT


like
floating in a warmwombbath
the starchild
blissssss
one of a kind
b

bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-08-29 12:34 PM


Thanks for bringin' your afterhours
in here, Sen.

Mike

brian sites
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6 posted 2002-08-30 12:33 PM


drop another coin
B-4 again
yes

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-08-30 12:43 PM


popping in for a quick thank ye kindly...and bri? I didn't know you could sing!

anybody care to dance? Thanks, all!

brian sites
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8 posted 2002-09-04 02:02 AM


ahuh!
I'm gonna keep feedin this jukebox until
somebody tears the cord out of the wall
and then you got a fight

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
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9 posted 2002-09-04 02:08 AM


well, the boy'z been a singing to me for sometime...and kwite the voice i might add, especially with his new genre of tunes, but such skilled-know-how as this would be the only that illicits such responses. again, a phantastic "right", blaze!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

Ceinwyn
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10 posted 2002-09-05 12:26 PM


I have that song in my head now..and thats not a bad thing you won't here me complaining..yes can finally blare out At last..well you know the whole emphasizing thing

Kristen

WhileIWasGone
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11 posted 2002-09-05 09:45 PM


Dang I love your work!!! Great job...

DeaDiAmore

wranx
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12 posted 2002-09-07 12:40 PM


Huh? Which? B4? Okay!

kachunk.


serenity blaze
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13 posted 2002-09-07 12:49 PM


why is this such a lonely dance of jubilee?
A. L. Becker
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since 2002-09-06
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14 posted 2002-09-07 03:11 AM


...and life is liike a song...

Annie :-

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2002-09-07 05:39 AM


good answer, annie....
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