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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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0 posted 2002-08-20 09:38 PM



Is this what you wanted?
Is this what you need?
You wanted to make me
an emotional monstrosity!?

I hope this is what you wanted...
I hope this is what you need.
I hope it made you happy when..
I let you take advantange of my corruptibility!

This isn't where...
Where I want to be.
This isn't who...
Who i was supposed to be.
You have created..
no- you've altered me.

You'll get it soon,
and you will never guess


it was me




"Paint your perfect day, I don't mind this. I'm better off by the way - Deeply grounded... You will get yours yours."
-Bush (*cold contagious*)

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (08-21-2002 05:41 PM).]

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arthur
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1 posted 2002-08-21 05:39 PM


i understand this
a good description
arthur

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-08-21 05:42 PM


Killer ending there, Sara. Now stop acting like Dawn from Buffy the Vampire Slayer or I'm going to have to run away.
Moon Dust
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3 posted 2002-08-21 05:42 PM


is this about losing trust with someone. But all in all it was an interesting read

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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4 posted 2002-08-21 05:49 PM




thanks everyone..

and moondust,

It's about losing someone completely.
About how you think you can know and *trust* someone, and then they go and stab you in the back and turn you into something you never wanted to be.
And it sucks.  



"Paint your perfect day, I don't mind this. I'm better off by the way - Deeply grounded... You will get yours yours."
-Bush (*cold contagious*)

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (08-21-2002 05:51 PM).]

fractal007
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5 posted 2002-08-21 07:33 PM


Heh.  I like the sizable outburst of emotion displayed in this poem.  The style is a lot like that seen in some contemporary rock and metal music.  

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Moon Dust
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6 posted 2002-08-22 02:53 PM


Yeah I know thats what I meant just explain myself badly sometimes.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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