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dj29
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since 2002-08-19
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0 posted 2002-08-19 07:08 PM


Cant you see me dieing

cant you feel my pain

Dont you hear me cry'in

Its enough to drive me insane

all I wanted was a great life

now i see its here

all the things i had to sacrifice

and noone seems to care

now i hope to live on

through this pain inside

to me it seems to be a con

on this crazy ride

that we call life

dont you care about me

or do you stab me with the knife

right through the heart...oh cant you see

that its in PIECES already

all i ever seemed to of wanted

is for people to love me

now i know all is said

and i better go

cause you see me cry'in

and you seem to know

that inside im die'in

so if i say im fine

then you know im lie'in

and the pain will remain mine...........

© Copyright 2002 Daniel J. Feola - All Rights Reserved
Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2002-08-19 07:16 PM


Hey there Danny, great job here on your first post on the blue pages.
Beautifully done. Hooray I say
You'll love it around here.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
2 posted 2002-08-20 01:54 AM


"A con on this crazy ride"
Indeed!
A nice, eloquent piece.
Thanks for sharing!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

Moon Dust
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3 posted 2002-08-20 05:11 PM


Too true, you've amazed me again.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

E
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between the rouge
4 posted 2002-08-20 07:49 PM


Spacing it out had me lingering off... other than that.. smashing.

Welcome

Ariel was always my favorite babe.

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