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Chameleon
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0 posted 2002-08-15 02:24 AM



SILENCE!
Hear what I say,
enemies like spray.
SILENCE!
No inner sense!
I am Death,
Out of breath.
SILENCE!
FIBER OPTICS!

ERROR HERE!
Another smear.
Streak your transparency further.
Spear-in and out-
quasi Sentiment.

Paint templatic faces, clone the copies,
Black market nursery...

[This message has been edited by Chameleon (08-16-2002 05:52 AM).]

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-08-15 05:47 PM


You have an interesting perspective here--tho I confess this is sort of cryptic for me--but I too, like to write that way--somtimes I just like the space for interpretation--and I do see that you encourage critique--and? since I'm not exactly sure what you are trying to say, I can't very well offer an opinion on improving that--smiling here, but feel free to enlighten ME! Welcome! (and I gently add that you may find a typo in "black-market nusery...") and feel free to return the favor for me anytime!


Chameleon
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since 2002-08-07
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2 posted 2002-08-15 07:51 PM


thankyou serenity.
Well, that typo?
Thats the error  

its meant to be 'black market nursery'

[This message has been edited by Chameleon (08-16-2002 05:53 AM).]

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2002-08-16 03:28 AM


um...I will "mea culpa" all over m'self, if I can find a definition for nusery....sigh...and? it's been a long night, and? damned if I didn't have miles to go before I sleep!

(s'what else is new...grin)

nice to meetcha!

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