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Dark Poetry #3

Lost In The Mist

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

0 posted 2002-08-12 02:49 AM

Children lying sick
Lost in the mist
Maybe they'll die
Maybe they'll grow old
Believe in me
'Cause I belive in you
You're beautiful
Lay in my arms
You're beautiful
So very beautiful

Can't belive
That this is truly true
Are you here with me
Am I just asleep
Believe in you
'Cause you belive in me
We're beautiful
Lying by ourselves
We're beautiful
So very beautiful

Children lying sick
Lost in the mist
Maybe they'll die
Maybe they'll grow old

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

1 posted 2002-08-12 12:07 PM

I could go into SO many readings of this poem...as only the author knows for certain...

You've brought on the idea of faith with this one...I'd love to hear you true take on this!!!

hard facts, and even harder emotions you've portrayed!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2002-08-13 01:53 AM

This one, when read, came out like a saddeningly beautiful song. I actually heard it during the reading. And what devina said was so matter of fact to truth, there's so much here that's awesome, but there's so much here that's not openly conveyed.
You have a true gift, News. I loved this one to the point of tears.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

3 posted 2002-08-13 02:22 AM

scary. the quick, yet somehow easy transition from sick lying children to beauty lying in your arms...
and was the use of "belive" meant to be believe each time, or was that an even furthering of the scariness?
either way, this was deep.

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

[This message has been edited by EveGnosis (08-13-2002 02:24 AM).]

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

4 posted 2002-08-14 11:20 AM

I agree with the others this is very deep.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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