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akira Member
since 2002-07-13
Posts 79Idaho |
I love you, this you know is true But when it comes to how I feel You haven’t got a clue You try to act like you know all But in the end it will be my Heart that will fall But you do not care About the pan I’m in You just sit and stare You don’t feel what I do But if you did you’d want It to But since I’m stuck With you, all I can say is “Awww (yuck)” **************************************************** Written by Akira Copyright 2002 Akira www.poetrypoems.com/akira Aol/Aim name: mjhawaii50 Yahoo Messenger name: Akiras_Fire Email: Akiras_Fire@yahoo.com [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (08-06-2002 01:14 PM).] |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
hiy dear,, Well in my opinion, you r good,, I like your words..And I like the way you feel..just write more strong words and it will be done.. By the way, I am new here and I really liked the site its cool..And I will be glad if u just have alook in my new topic and give me ur opinion too,,, I am sure u r much better than me.. just correct my mistakes and I will be greatfull.. good luck,, |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I thought the poem was very good at showing the rut of a bad relationship, but I had to edit out one of the words, per PIP guidelines. Mike Said if I only could ... |
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