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StarrGazer
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0 posted 2002-08-01 01:59 PM


You once spoke to
Me in rainbows
So sure that I
had hung the moon
And in streaming
Ribbons of compliments
Assured me forever
Would end too soon

But, now in memories
Streaked black and gray
You look at me -
Then look away
The tenderness of your
Work calloused hands
Has drifted away
Like grains of sand

The rainbows have faded
And ribbons are tattered
And you act as though
None of that mattered
Your hands arc back
To justify an unknown wrong
And I shrink away
All tenderness gone

These scenes they flash
Like a slide show in my mind
And each time they do -
More pain I find
Love has died and I'm not sure
You want to be in the same room
Much less leave a single
Flower for my tomb


[This message has been edited by StarrGazer (08-01-2002 08:32 PM).]

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bsquirrel
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1 posted 2002-08-01 02:18 PM


Wow. You're very good at rhyme schemes, StarrGazer. It doesn't feel forced, but natural. And I love the message/story of this poem.

Mike

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devina
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2 posted 2002-08-01 02:59 PM


Such painful thought you evoke!!!

Loved this side of the challenge!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



StarrGazer
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3 posted 2002-08-01 08:36 PM


Thanks squirrel and Devina   

LOL seems like as long as people keep issuing such catchy challenges I'm able to write but other than that...

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