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WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23
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somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-07-31 01:20 PM



Today I'm stumbling over my words
fighting back a sense of turmoil
that is backing up in my gut
making me feel on the verge
of being sick.

I'm looking back and looking forward
the outlook is the same it appears
love is fleeting, love is unpure
love never stays until the rent is due.

The box that holds my life
is pitifully empty of happiness
yet overflowing with a darkness
that is permeating my brain.

I'm afraid of being forgotten
like some pale author who wrote from the heart
and then fell off the face of the earth
into an oblivion deep and wide.

I fear being used, played out
emotionless and wasted
then tossed into the trash
with all the rest of the scarlet women.

I look around my small space
fitfully I scream at the lack of belonging
is this even my space
or just a space I've stolen.

Today seems to go on forever
each minute longer than the last
each second painfully, excruciatingly slow
ticks by
it angers me with it's methodic precision.

I'm hoping for tomorrow now
I'm hoping the sun will come out in my sky
and the shadows of this past
will be blown away in a blaze of glory.

WhiteRose

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (07-31-2002 01:21 PM).]

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wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2002-07-31 01:29 PM


Nice angst there W'Rose.

Fear not, a new day'll dawn and all will be well once again.

Hell! even I'm in a good mood now and again.


~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon
2 posted 2002-07-31 01:58 PM


Wranx
   Yes this is true, but at times the dawn seems so very far away. The sun does always rise, even as the heart cries, it will light the sky anew every day. Thank you for the comment.

MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
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between the gutter & the stars
3 posted 2002-07-31 02:51 PM


i like the way you mix up the rhythm in the 1st and second to last stanzas... you don't let the reader get in a groove, a reminder that this is about stumbling out of step...
very cool.

"I'm afraid of being forgotten
like some pale author who wrote from the heart
and then fell off the face of the earth
into an oblivion deep and wide."
my one and only fear...dying alone and forgotten. well penned this one.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-07-31 04:05 PM


I started highlighting the passes I liked, then realized I had the whole poem selected. Great job, WRose. Hope you'll post more here. Dark's always thirsty for talent.

Mike

Said if I only could ...
-KB

bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-07-31 04:06 PM


That should read "passages." Sheesh!
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