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The Silence Before Ketchup
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The Silence Before Ketchup |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Is it funny Or is it just you? Where's originality At this second's beckoning? Too many Nightmares, Halloweens Fridays and Deads of Evil Plots become as beautiful As an oil painting titled "The Dung Life" The sad part of a special place is that others can litter it and make so much less its original beauty when true friends in the know shared inspiring and supportive views where love lines were cursived in true ruby red as opposed to the fake ketchup that modern cinematography feels is lifelike blood the taste of silence once deemed deathly slowness seems much more spicy these days for the taste of offerings from pass the time "oh-wells" are bitter to the palate when one could at the very least be at McDonalds knowing what to expect It would seem these days that this silent taste would liken itself to a nice merlot one in which its label suggests not to mix with less than perfect ponderable digestions. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Is it funny Or is it just you?" loved this opener, and actually, if I'm to answer? I'd have to say that I am not quite sure...or even if there is a point of difference. smiling, and found the originality...here... Enjoyed. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
wow purity- a poem that says much and done with subtlety, wit, and a touch of disgust AND answers a challenge! love it BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hats off to you, Purity.  A fun li'l stunner.She said burn ... together. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn, Purity It seems we write for the same yearbook. ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is the most opinionated piece I've read in a LONG time...it's good to see this here!!! and? challenge well met!! and this? where love lines were cursived in true ruby red as opposed to the fake ketchup that modern cinematography feels is lifelike blood all too true... enjoyed this from beginning to end lady!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
never before have i seen someone take such a strike back stand at a topic, and do it with such poetic blatancy as to be vague enough to make those who didn't get it's point think it to be a great write. (which it is by my own definition). this was so sly, and so great, and yet i had no idea by the title. you are well, just you. darn good write. i laughed, yet in awe. and i couldn't help but wonder if devina's response would change if she found out that the "lady" in her compliments was actually a very unique dude...lol i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. [This message has been edited by EveGnosis (07-31-2002 01:56 AM).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sir, you have written well...one of the best I've seen from you I think. Good work..  K |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*blushing* you know? I REALLY need to stop guessing on these things..I'm HORRIBLE at it (obviously)... Now that I know...smiles...it won't happen again...I think I'll start making that my first post on every welcome? girl or boy? I can't really lift any skirts round here to shek for myself...  tsk to me.... (exits..lifting me own skirt a bit) Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Thanks to you all for the responses! And Devina, not a problem at all. Even if standing before you with my long hair and all, you might still question...LOL Thanks for your response. |
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