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WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18
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0 posted 2002-07-26 12:25 PM



A season beyond your kiss

a thousand dreams I've seen before me
wishes caught in the web of reality
willows conceal where I undress my soul
to shed the past, leaving behind the whispers
with a kiss to the ground, where passion once
danced along our flesh, now
blood soaked roots rise, trying to claim my breath

it was just a season, nothing more
a moment caught between here and there
while four stars fell to earth in a white hot flash
I claimed the heat as my own, and rose

rose above you, above the lies
...above the way you pulled me in and let me dangle
and now, cutting away the willows drapery ... I see the truth
I don't need to get any higher..
my spirit is alive ..
my life is my own ... my heart is strong
and you
           were just a season

© Copyright 2002 Dea_Di_Amore - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2002-07-26 12:31 PM


DeaDi, I'm glad I stayed up a bit longer to find this.

The last stanza is, of course, the point and I loved it. But this is worth the price of admission

"a thousand dreams I've seen before me
wishes caught in the web of reality
willows conceal where I undress my soul
to shed the past, leaving behind the whispers
with a kiss to the ground, where passion once
danced along our flesh, now
blood soaked roots rise, trying to claim my breath"

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-07-26 02:05 PM


What I love about this poem is how willowy and dense-leaved it is.  You really have to pick slowly through the words, and can feel the touch of the tree's curtain on you as you do.

AWESOME! (now I need to write a willow poem. )

That is ... aside from this one.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
3 posted 2002-07-28 01:51 PM


You are beautiful in this girlie...

and?
willows conceal where I undress my soul
to shed the past, leaving behind the whispers

shadows repast for me...I love this!!!

take care you!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Syneq
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since 2002-07-28
Posts 40

4 posted 2002-07-28 06:34 PM


This is one of the best ways that I have encountered in visualizing nature's part of moving onward.

I may look to this one specifically when I loose perspective of myself.

Thank you

Disintegrated to materialize in reformed delight.

LSM
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since 2002-07-28
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Oregon
5 posted 2002-07-28 06:42 PM


WhileIWasGone, I love what words do with you

LSM
  

mycafe
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since 2002-05-23
Posts 584

6 posted 2002-07-29 01:57 AM


A GREAT WRITE!!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

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