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WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

0 posted 2002-07-24 12:35 PM

I thought...
perhaps that was my mistake
I thought when we laughed
when we talked
when we played
that you cared
I thought
That for a moment
I shone like a star
Center stage in spotlight
It all revolved around me
The shine was the glimmer
of gaudy neon lights
on shattered glass
unseen
crushed beneath passing feet
to nothing
I clung
To words and promises
life preservers in the tempest
When you learned that I was broken
lost now and in need
One hand clung to the thread
the other reached to you
you turned
I watched you walk away
Time for letting go
of dreams that never were
Hopes that will never be
I release the thread
and close my eyes
and let the storm take me

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

1 posted 2002-07-24 01:31 PM

I really enjoyed this.
Very sad in a way, though.

-Sara

"With poetry and suffering, I cannibalized every ounce of my pain"
-Otep

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2002-07-24 09:20 PM

Your wounded writing, wounds this reader. Can't help being sympathetic to this. Makes me recall the way that I've lived.

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

lauren03
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 64
oh, usa

3 posted 2002-07-25 12:19 PM

i really liked the poem, i know how it feels........ been there before. well good poem, and keep it up.

shadowchild458
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since 2002-07-10

Posts 117
MN,USA

4 posted 2002-07-25 10:25 AM

awwww sad! It kinda puts the reader in a trance though, it's so powerful and it seems like it's got so much meaning to it. I'm putting this one in my library too! Keep writing, as always, I loved it.

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

5 posted 2002-07-25 08:09 PM

Have we not ALL been here???
I know this is one thing that brings people to common likeness..."the pain"

enjoyed this girl...

good to read you again!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

6 posted 2002-07-26 12:16 PM

Thanks guys for all the kind replies!

DeaDiAmore

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-09-19 01:13 PM

Well then,
let's bring this storm
back to the Dark surface.

Mike

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

8 posted 2002-09-19 01:18 PM

Thanks M for reading...and the reply.

H.

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

9 posted 2002-09-19 01:54 PM

I'm glad Mike brought it up from the dark, another intense write young lady. You truly dig deep within yourself when you write, giving us a glimpse inside. Another literary masterpiece of woven feelings that weave together so well it is read as tapestry for the mind to feel. Very much enjoyed this "storm".

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