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WhileIWasGone
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0 posted 2002-07-24 01:07 AM



She smiles through a thousand tears
so that no one knows her aches and fears
consumed by great shyness
that swallows her whole
so that no one sees the fire burning in her soul
she never speaks up says nothing at all
afraid someone will notice if she should happen to fall.
Trying to hide
disappear from the crowd
feeling left out like she's not allowed
locks everything up
where it never comes out
so no one can feel her worry and doubt
longing for the day
when she'll finally be free
so that people can see
that she really is me.



[This message has been edited by WhileIWasGone (07-24-2002 01:42 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-07-24 01:08 AM


nice poem...i really liked it... the words "noone" should be "no one", right?

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

WhileIWasGone
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2 posted 2002-07-24 01:39 AM


Thanks.....yes it is should be "no one"

Thanks for reading....

DeaDiAmore

wranx
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3 posted 2002-07-24 08:46 AM


Hello, shygirl
I can see that what has been held captive within, is making itself known.
And with this, can start to see you.

You do good work.


~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

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shadowchild458
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4 posted 2002-07-24 12:30 PM


bravo!!! bravo!!!

i loved this! it was so wonderful and flowed so well! yes things will get better my dear friend things will certanly get better and until then, cheer up! you show your face through your poetry and you've got a lovely family here! wonderful! wonderful! wonderful!...

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

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5 posted 2002-07-24 04:27 PM


As a former 'shy girl' I can tell you that even an extrovert isn't really who they say they are and still feels locked up. It's all a matter of discovering what it is that connects with your innerself.
Kudos on a wonderful piece.

"I am not alive enough to kill myself." - Mary Ipal

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6 posted 2002-07-25 04:01 PM


She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
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7 posted 2002-07-25 11:45 PM


Glad to see you out of your shell...

now you won't miss the fun girlie!!!

smiles to you on this!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



WhileIWasGone
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8 posted 2002-07-26 12:07 PM


Thanks guys for all the sweet replies.

DeaDiAmore

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