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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
({I'm not sure if anyone will understand this ... but I guess you could say Shodowchild, kind of inspired me.}) Will we ever truly become a part of reality? Is there really even a reality? Or is it something we make up, So we can believe that we're really here, somewhere, or that someday we will belong? Will we ever truly find this man called Christ? Is there really even one? Or is he something we just make up, So we can have something to believe in, hold onto, or that someday we will save us all? How can you be sure that there is something, or nothing over this mountain? It seems impossible to climb. It seems never ending. If you don't try you'll never know. But sometimes, things are best, unknown. (I told you'd it suck shadowchild... criticize it for me, k?  It was better before i messed with it) [This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (07-23-2002 09:53 PM).] |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
now here's one that i can relate to... these are questions i ask, well not everyday...but 4 times a week certainly.  "or that someday we will save us all?" that one i do think about every day.... this one i thoroughly enjoyed. well penned. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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shadowchild458 Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 117MN,USA |
lol sara, it doesn't suck! oh and you didn't spell my screen name right the first time lol oh well. the answer is no we can never be sure. we can never trust ourselves fully enough to not doubt. it was actually pretty good. but if you really want my honest opinion it wasn't very creative, kinda dull i mean the subject was creative but the structure, the way it flows wasn't. i think if you somehow made it in a different structure it would sound better. well ttyl! bye! life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Thanks Midnight... I love hearing your replies! And shadowchild... I realized that for some reason, I used to call you SD, for short (should have been SC) ... did you notice that? Lol, I'm messed up. Anyway, that's for your reply. (very truthful, which is what I wanted) Your criticism is respected, and expected. Thanks again to you both. _sara "With poetry and suffering, I cannibalized every ounce of my pain" |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I thought this was a very thoughtful poem and I liked the structure of each stanza being the same, with some repetition to hammer the message home. heavy questions to ask and of which everyone asks in their life as for the end? I want to know! good job BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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