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bittersweet (blood an rainbows) |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
i've tried to steer clear of forlorn loveloss poetry, but this challenge brought me back to the well and here it is... *sigh* sorry guys. it's one of those and yeah. i listen to goo goo dolls while i work.... oh and thanks to mikey for making me get off my butt and work for this one. great challenge. *bittersweet* blood and rainbows; all i see and this is my apology it wasn't supposed to get out of hand you were just supposed to understand and all your smiles can't save this hurt all i wanted... and all the lines get a little blurred all i wanted... and i'm not sure that my heart can convince my nerve the memory starts to fade the dreams turn into stains a bittersweet eulogy blood and rainbows; all i see i don't want your sympathy lonely mornings from friendly lust the guilty flowers have turned to dust all the days you left me here all i wanted... last night's promises in my ears all i wanted... confusion clears and it tastes like day-old beer the memory starts to fade the dreams turn into stains a bittersweet eulogy blood and rainbows; all i see still the pain shows through the seams technicolor dreams of you and me on a black and white reality and now i see we'll never be the things i thought we were it's killin' me, but i believe that the world is still pure words unspoken, rip me open now i'm dying on the bedroom floor blood and rainbow's symphony a bittersweet cacophony it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown [This message has been edited by MidnightSon (07-22-2002 04:42 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I really enjoyed this, and I'm glad th' challenge has sparked such good poetry in you (and all here). She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-22-2002 07:17 PM).] |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
I've read a few chalanges before, but this is the best by far. I hope to see more of your poetry here. (dark poetry). Keep writing. -Sara "And I feel your heart beat/Pounding in my head/I'd like to control you/Cuz I can't control myself." -GreyDaze |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
seriously, outstanding... ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
yes! yes! yes! very good like the repeating lines they hammer it into the eye damn! BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Another great response. The challenge appears to have been met, in fine fashion ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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shadowchild458 Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 117MN,USA |
i say what i mean, i mean what i say ...i love this poem! it is so good. the way it all flows together is just so perfect...i can't explain it i just love it... life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
"...words unspoken, rip me open now i'm dying on the bedroom floor blood and rainbow's symphony a bittersweet cacophony..." A Beautiful Journey through a Bittersweet Story...I got lost in this ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Yes man!!! I love the idea of guilty flowers!!! and? You've went and used my FAVORITE word...(cacophony)...it's just one of those words that beg to be used!! challenge well met...glad to see you posting again sweets!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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