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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
This mental distance, That drives you away Makes me want to die. This phenomenal calling That drives me to you, Makes me want to cry. This facial look, That you’ve given to me Makes me think you want me. But I’m wrong. You must be a machine. There is no one like you. You are too perfectly flawless. You say you had a good childhood. Rarely anyone does. You tell me how you hated your sister. This I don't believe. Cause you were never a child. You’re new. You’re unreal. You’re inhuman. You’re too perfect To be real. Nothing is this good. And if it is… It costs. 7.02.02 "And I feel your heart beat/Pounding in my head/I'd like to control you/Cuz I can't control myself." -GreyDaze [This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (07-22-2002 12:41 PM).] |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
i liked this idea a lot. some things are too good to be true.... the phrase that stood out was "facial look". a lil redundant, but it didn't detract from poem. the last 2 stanzas were wonderful. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
I'll remeber that..  Thanks for your truthful reply. When I'm feeling such as I do, I sometimes am less creative, and my words are lost. ...it's hard to describe what I feel... I guess is what I'm trying to say. I couldn't find the perfect word, so i settled.  Thanks again. -Sara "And I feel your heart beat/Pounding in my head/I'd like to control you/Cuz I can't control myself." -GreyDaze |
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